Lightness of Being

PHOTO PROMPT © Carla Bicomong

Some found the thought unbearable and couldn’t bring themselves to do it, though like thousands of others, they’d traveled to this sacred place intending to release a burden.

With trembling hands, one man attempted to place his smart phone on the tiny boat of light.

A young woman approached. “You can do it,” she whispered.

“I can’t!” he cried, grabbing the phone. He held it up to take a picture. “Beautiful. I’m sharing on Facebook.”

The woman walked to the shore and took a stranger’s hand. “Beautiful, isn’t it?” she said.

A thousand lights twinkled in the stranger’s eyes. “Indeed.”

THE END
100 Words

Friday Fictioneers is a compilation of writers from around the world who gather online weekly, guided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The challenge? To write a story in 100 words or less based on a new photo prompt.

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51 Responses to Lightness of Being

  1. neilmacdon says:

    It can be hard to let go

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  2. Linda Apple says:

    Amazing. Wow. I. Love. This!

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  3. Dear Jan,

    This made me laugh and cringe at the same time. I’ll echo Linda. Wow.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Jan Morrill says:

      Thank you, Rochelle. It comes from my own experiences with experiencing visual beauty. I’m always tempted to be that one to snap a photo and share it. But at least I think about what’s lost in doing so. 🙂

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  4. Great moment here, Jan. The imagery is splendid.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    Funny, and at the same time, an indictment on society and the times we live in. Excellent Jan.

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  6. granonine says:

    Oh, how I love this! The girl certainly was much wiser and more sensitive than the iPhone-addicted man!

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  7. StuHN says:

    This was beautiful.

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  8. michael1148humphris says:

    A well told story which makes one ask questions about modern addictions.

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  9. James Pyles says:

    I wrote something similar.

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  10. gahlearner says:

    That was funny and sad at the same time. The woman and the stranger know what counts in life.

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    • Jan Morrill says:

      It’s the life outside technology that counts, if we’d only give ourselves a chance to experience it fully. Hard to break the temptation of snapping the photo and sharing it though!

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  11. trentpmcd says:

    Very well told. I hope I’d have the strength to be the one with the thousand lights in my eyes instead of the one with the thousand likes on Facebook…

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  12. Lynn Love says:

    I feel sad for the man who couldn’t let go, who snatched up his phone rather than living in that moment. Truly looking is a wonder and a joy. Lovely work Jan

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  13. Dale says:

    So many of us forget to enjoy the moment… and feel that capturing it on our phones will make it last… Beautifully done.

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  14. 4963andypop says:

    Keep the cellphone, lose the girl.

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  15. jillyfunnell says:

    I love that she seems to have found a kindred spirit. A tender, thoughtful story.

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  16. subroto says:

    Ha! Ha! Nice one. Reality is overrated, life is better on Facebook anyway.

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  17. pennygadd51 says:

    Oh! I really felt sad for the man addicted to his iPhone! You’ve constructed the story very well, Jan, to contrast the man and his phone with the man who had a thousand lights twinkling in his eyes, and you’ve written it with grace.

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    • Jan Morrill says:

      Thank you, Penny. Sadly, the two men are my alter-egos at such an event. It’s such a temptation to take a picture for posterity, perhaps even share it with others. But it’s true that this detracts significantly from the moment.

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  18. Alice Audrey says:

    It’ the age old question – to actually live life or to try to capture it.

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  19. James McEwan says:

    My goodness, how can anyone consider making a sacrifice of their smart phone, why it’s like giving up chocolate!
    Fun read.

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  20. Varad says:

    Ha! This was a fantastic interpretation of the prompt. Very well done.

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  21. Very entertaining story! You created beautiful imagery of laying down burdens and releasing them. He just couldn’t do it, maybe there’ll come a time he can.

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  22. Who is that evil woman trying to deprive us of our smart phones? Who created her? Is she some sort of Russian bot? Does Donald know her? We deserve to be told.

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