A lucky koi am I
To live here
Surrounded by gardens
And best of all, stacked rocks
Because I remember stories
My grandfather told me
Of watching monks stack one by one
One by one
In Japan
Before he was brought to this place
A century ago
Now we swim together
I watch his brilliant orange and pearly white grace,
And envy, with one black spot
Smeared across my eye
No matter
Each day at noon
Old-Man-In-Khaki tosses morsels
And a hundred koi plunge and dip in a ravenous dance
While visitors admire
A lucky koi am I
THE END
Friday Fictioneers is a compilation of writers from around the world who gather online weekly, guided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The challenge? To write a story in 100 words or less based on a new photo prompt.
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Thank you for another great photo prompt, Sandra Crook. As you can see, I love koi and stacked rocks, so it’s no wonder I wrote from the point of view of the koi in the ponds surrounding this beautiful place! 🙂
I enjoyed that poem. Great write this week! 🙂 ❤
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Thank you, Jelli!
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A unique point of view, nicely done.
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Thank you, Iain. I’m often attracted to unique points of view and wonder sometimes if I go a bit too far. 🙂
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Not at all this time 🙂
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Dear Jan,
I love the koi POV. When I looked at this picture you came to mind immediately. 😉 Lovely poem.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, Rochelle. I obviously couldn’t resist drawing stacked rocks into my story. 🙂
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I love that poem/story. I, too, have koi in my pond, and they are a source of joy to me. They’re jolly greedy though!
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Penny, lucky are you to have koi to gaze at, even during their ravenous (greedy) dance. 🙂
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What a lovely voice you create for a koi, Jan, full of grace with only a hint of disgrace. A vivid view of life inside that pond and touching on life outside. Really enjoyed this. Well done.
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Thank you, Kelvin. In this photo, life inside the pond seemed more interesting to me than life outside. 🙂
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Such a wonderful poem, Jan. A nice and totally different take on the prompt.
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Thank you, Dale!
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Simply delightful Jan and a refreshing change from everything else I’ve read.
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One of the best compliments I can receive as a writer, Keith–refreshing. Thank you so much!
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What a delightful vignette of life you have captured from the POV of a koi. Lucky are we to read you, Jan.
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Thank you, Neel. I enjoyed your rags-to-riches story, too. (And there’s more to that story, I believe.) 🙂
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I found the beat happy and joyful.
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Thank you, James! One of the pleasures of being a writer!
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What a beautiful song by the koi… both the memories and the future of swimming and eating.
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Thank you, Björn! I like the idea of koi songs. 🙂
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Suddenly, I was reminded of the Emerson, Lake, and Palmer song, “Oh, What Lucky Koi He Was.”
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Now I have that song in my head, too, Russell! 🙂
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Outstanding! Really enjoyed this.
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Thank you, Linda!
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Very nice! I like the POV of the koi. Very original.
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Thanks, Curt!
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Great story. A century old Koi; how cool!
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