Happy Place

PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook

A lucky koi am I
To live here
Surrounded by gardens
And best of all, stacked rocks
Because I remember stories
My grandfather told me
Of watching monks stack one by one
One by one
In Japan
Before he was brought to this place
A century ago
Now we swim together
I watch his brilliant orange and pearly white grace,
And envy, with one black spot
Smeared across my eye
No matter
Each day at noon
Old-Man-In-Khaki tosses morsels
And a hundred koi plunge and dip in a ravenous dance
While visitors admire
A lucky koi am I


Friday Fictioneers is a compilation of writers from around the world who gather online weekly, guided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The challenge? To write a story in 100 words or less based on a new photo prompt.

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Thank you for another great photo prompt,  Sandra Crook. As you can see, I love koi and stacked rocks, so it’s no wonder I wrote from the point of view of the koi in the ponds surrounding this beautiful place! 🙂

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28 Responses to Happy Place

  1. Jelli says:

    I enjoyed that poem. Great write this week! 🙂 ❤

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    A unique point of view, nicely done.

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  3. Dear Jan,

    I love the koi POV. When I looked at this picture you came to mind immediately. 😉 Lovely poem.



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  4. pennygadd51 says:

    I love that poem/story. I, too, have koi in my pond, and they are a source of joy to me. They’re jolly greedy though!

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  5. What a lovely voice you create for a koi, Jan, full of grace with only a hint of disgrace. A vivid view of life inside that pond and touching on life outside. Really enjoyed this. Well done.

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  6. Dale says:

    Such a wonderful poem, Jan. A nice and totally different take on the prompt.

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  7. Simply delightful Jan and a refreshing change from everything else I’ve read.

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  8. What a delightful vignette of life you have captured from the POV of a koi. Lucky are we to read you, Jan.

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  9. James McEwan says:

    I found the beat happy and joyful.

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  10. What a beautiful song by the koi… both the memories and the future of swimming and eating.

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  11. rgayer55 says:

    Suddenly, I was reminded of the Emerson, Lake, and Palmer song, “Oh, What Lucky Koi He Was.”

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  12. granonine says:

    Outstanding! Really enjoyed this.

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  13. curtmercer says:

    Very nice! I like the POV of the koi. Very original.

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  14. athling2001 says:

    Great story. A century old Koi; how cool!


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