Beautiful Once

PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook

Beautiful Once

Drizzle chilled her as she stared at the house across the street. It must have been beautiful once.

Beautiful once.

How could she not compare its demise to her marriage? It had been beautiful once, too.

Her gaze, blurred by tears, traced jagged cracks from the foundation, and the gaping hole in the front wall exposed the home’s very heart. She stood alone on the street, yet swore she heard the echo of children’s laughter as they chased each other up and down the stairs.

But it was empty. Irreparable. And memories wouldn’t matter, once it all came crumbling down.

THE END

Friday Fictioneers is a compilation of writers from around the world who gather online weekly, guided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The challenge? To write a story in 100 words or less based on a new photo prompt.

Click HERE to read more stories in an online flash fiction anthology by the Friday Fictioneers.

Thank you, Sandra Crook. Your photo brought back memories.

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29 Responses to Beautiful Once

  1. Very nicely written, Jan.

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  2. Moon says:

    Sigh!
    Beautifully written, as always, Jan.

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  3. A real sense of hopelessness in your words. Excellent.

    Click to read my FriFic!

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  4. Oh, I felt so sorry for her! But I disagreed with her too… memories do matter, especially when it all comes crumbling down.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    A sad metaphor. Nicely written.

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  6. pennygadd51 says:

    A fluent story, using a powerful metaphor.

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  7. Dale says:

    Well done, Jan. We both went the metaphor way!

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  8. Dear Jan,

    This one made my heart ache. Beautifully written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. Well done with a longer, sad story hinted at.

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  10. Kwadwo says:

    This is a lovely story, Jan. The sense of hopelessness and loss is something we can relate to.

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  11. What a lovely story… and so sad. The parallel between the house and the marriage are excellent.

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  12. Dan Bohn says:

    Some things are repairable. Great story.

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  13. amiewrites74 says:

    This is heartbreaking. Strong metaphor, beautifully written.

    Like

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